Wednesday, 11 May 2016

100WC Week #17


                                                           I'm dead, great


I wake up on a small island that has a stairway to heaven.  So I'm
 dead, perfect.  I head up the stairs on my way I ran into som guy named Baby Ruth, weird. A million years later I met famous soccer player George Best. We talked then I continued my journey to the top. Finally I made it but then I herd a ding, and saw an elevator.  You don't know how mad I'am.
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5 comments:

  1. Unknown11 May 2016 at 11:58

    Your story is really good

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  2. lillytiger11 May 2016 at 14:28

    You are missing a comma after I head up the stairs (comma) or you could say and. Also you need a comma after way. The last word you added a '
    Good job!!!

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  3. Unknown12 May 2016 at 09:32

    Is Babe ruth and and Gorge best a million years apart? My question is how did you get to the island in the first place. Another thing is that herd is spelled heard.

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  4. Unknown12 May 2016 at 09:33

    I don't really understand any of your story. You met some famous people ok, but then you said a million years later. And when did the elevator come in, I think you need some more details and clarification on that.

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